On Learning To See Flaws In Your Writing
The Stages Of Writing
- Phase 1 is to think everything you write is amazing.
- Phase 2 is the growing realization that everything you write isn’t actually as amazing as you thought. This is more than just getting a critique from someone –often, it’s actually understanding the thing being pointed out by the critiquer. This feels a bit like learning Santa Claus isn’t real. Your world view becomes a little shaken.
- Phase 3 is the mounting horror as you come to believe that everything you write is so terrible that it should be burned in a fire. (This one isn’t as much fun as Phase 1)
- Phase 4 is the calm, stubborn understanding that nothing you write will ever be perfect, but it’s never as bad as Phase 3 thinks it is and that it’s WORTH the pain of imperfection for the privilege of writing and being read.
Worst of all? You don’t stay in a single phase. You bounce around a lot. Heck, in Unicorns, I ran through the whole gamut, from 1 to 4 at least twice, if not three times.
Just because you’ve pushed through the pain of advancing to Phase 4, that doesn’t mean you get to rest on your laurels. It DOES mean that getting past Phase 3 is easier next time. And easier still the time after that.
How To Get Past Phase 1
Sometimes, you’re sitting on Phase 1. You can see Phase 2 from here — other people see your work and point out flaws. The frustrating thing isn’t that you don’t believe them, it’s that you DO believe them, and can’t see the flaws yourself.
The work reads fine to you.
First off? Big hugs.
Secondly? Realize that we ALL begin this way.
That being said, you can’t just sit there if you intend people to keep reading the stuff you write.
Reading Aloud
The first recommendation (and possibly, the most important) is to READ YOUR STORY ALOUD.
Record yourself doing it.
Replay the recording after a little bit of time has passed. A couple days, at least.
Ideally, you’ll catch a lot of stuff when reading, but if you don’t, hopefully you’ll start to hear some of the flaws when listening to it.
Critique Group
This one’s hard, because no matter how good or bad a writer you are, it’s difficult to have something you love poked, prodded, and picked to shreds.
But if you can’t see the problems, one of the very best ways to learn how is to have other people highlight them for you.
Pay attention. Understand as much as you can about what wasn’t working so that maybe you can see it when you write it again. Over time, maybe you’ll stop writing it, but in the short term, you just want to be able to recognize it when you see it.
Let Your Favorite Author Teach You
Another way to improve is to take a book/scene that you feel did a GREAT job of … whatever it is that your critiquers are telling you is missing from your stories. Characters, pacing, romance, action, dialogue … whatever it is. For the sake of argument here, let’s say that you are Rhonda, and you want to write Romance, but your readers keep telling you that your characters are cardboard-thin and your romantic scenes are awkward.
Rhonda loves Diana Gabaldon, so I want you to grab your favorite novel. Outlander.
Pick two scenes from Outlander. First, the opening scene – where the writer introduces the main character. Second, a very emotionally-charged romance scene. There are … ah…multiples to choose from. *cough, blush*
You should:
- Read each scene once.
- Type/copy the scenes into your own document. (not plagarism unless you pretend you wrote it). This is your fingers feeling out the words other people use. It sounds dumb, I know. Do it anyway.
- Print out your typed copy (assuming that’s okay with you. You can do this digitally if you want, I just like to take notes)
- You are going to destroy your printed copy. Sorry if that disappoints you. Grab multicolored highlighters. Dissect that copy. What worked? Highlight in yellow. What didn’t? Highlight in blue. What precise words were used to heighten the tension and make you feel like part of that character’s life? Highlight in pink. How long were the passages? Write that out to the side. What were the most powerful words? Pink again. Do things like highlight a phrase or dialogue and make a note : “because of this, I know the character has a good sense of humor” or “because of this, I know how strongly the character wants to kiss the hero.”
- IMMEDIATELY AFTER DOING 4, go back to your story. Read the character introduction from a recent thing you wrote AND a love scene you recently wrote.
Now STOP, because you’ve just convinced yourself you suck. Deep breath.
You don’t suck. You CARE and you’re new at this and there’s NOTHING wrong with that. The only wrong thing here is to give up.
One more deep breath.
You just compared one of your first pieces of writing to someone you consider to be a VERY GOOD published author. If you came out of that comparison smelling of roses, I’d doubt your sanity. Nobody ever thinks they do well when compared to their heroes, no matter how good a writer they are.
What you need is to develop the kind of eye that can see the flaws in your own writing. Until you do that, you’ll keep writing them. (Heck, even after that, you’ll keep writing them .. but you’ll see them in revision and recognize them).
Now. Another deep breath. (don’t those feel good?)
Back to your writing.
Repeat number 4 above, but with your pieces.
This will hurt. Do it anyway. You’ll have more pink than yellow for now. That’s totally fine. Expected.
Draw lines to text and write notes in the margins “this didn’t work” or “bad sentence structure” or “need to do more X” (where X is something your favorite author did).
And when that’s all done?
Revise your original scenes. You’ll be tempted to just throw them out and completely rewrite them — I urge against this, because you’ll learn more from this revising than you will from a rewrite.
Don’t spend ages on this, especially if you’ve decided you won’t use it for anything. DO spend enough time to learn what it feels like to heavily edit your own writing at this level. It’s just two scenes — one for each big flaw you’ve got in your own writing. If you can’t revise two scenes to learn to be a better writer, then you’re really going to freak out the first time you submit an entire NOVEL filled with these errors and your agent/editor sends you a bunch of revisions.
This is the hardest way to learn, but you’re getting lessons from a successful, published author whose work you admire AND all your suggestions came from yourself. YOU saw them. YOU noticed them.
You did this.
And that is an amazing thing. =]
Don’t Give Up
Whatever you do, don’t give up on yourself OR your writing. So many times, I’ve heard people say that the most important writer trait is persistence and I believe them.

13 Comments
Tami,
This is so well timed for me. I’ve been struggling with a Phase 1 to Phase 2 transition with my Dragon story, and I have had some definate Phase 3 thoughts lately.
My big issue right now seems to be characters. I’m going to try your suggestions with Tanis Half Elven from The Chronicles and Cameron “Buck” Williams from Left Behind.
Any books you’ve read recently with some really ‘well drawn’ characters you’d recommend? Sci-Fi/Fantasy/Urban Fiction preferably.
Thank you so much for your blog, and for continuing to help me become a better writer.
Ted – I can also say from first-hand experience that your work does not belong in Phase 3!!
Stick it out, you’ll get there!
I highly recommend any of the characters from the Malazan Book of the Fallen series by Steven Erikson. Truly amazing characterization, with probably 20 main characters and tens more supporting cast, each one an individual with a history and a distinctive style. It’s a really long, complicated series, but one of the best I’ve ever read.
*hugs*!
One that comes immediately to mind was from the book Touch of Frost (the first in a YA series). It’s Urban Fantasy, and the main character feels very real, particularly in the way she’s dealing with the loss of her mother. Even though the loss happened months previously, you can really sympathize with her emotions.
Or, at least, I could. =]
Not every writer can or should characterize the same way, of course — so I’d vote you aim at the writers that have hit home with YOU because they’re the ones that your writing should probably be closest to.
Good luck! Getting there is incredibly hard the first few times, but it’s worth it to find yourself in Stage 4.
Amazing post, again!
I don’t like Phase 3, and yet I spend a lot of time there.
I’m afraid to admit that spend way too much time in Phase 2. I don’t believe my writing is great, but I can’t seem to find the flaws in it. The Saucy Ink group is absolutely phenomenal helping in this respect. Every comment they make, although each one hurts a little, helps me become a better writer. The Unicorn project taught me that when I listen to the advice and truly accept the helpful criticism, my story will get much, much better. (you are probably wishing they would critique my comments!)
I will tell you from first-hand experience on other topics, that following Tami’s advice, even when it seems silly (sorry Tami!), will work. Every time. Right now I’m rushing off to try this out on my Dragon story.
(Actually, I lied, I’m still sitting at work. But I’m wishing I could run off and try it!)
*laugh* No apologies necessary, sometimes it DOES seem silly. The reading out loud thing, for example. I feel ridiculous every time I do it … and I always improve the story when I do. =]
And you are SO right on the criticism. Taxidermist improved SO MUCH from that.
Do you think I would benefit from Holly’s course on self-editing? I’m not looking forward to editing my novel!
If you’re talking about the How To Revise Your Novel course, I can say that I learned more from that class than any other writing advice I’ve ever gotten.
It kicked my butt, and I wanted to quit in the middle a ton of times, but it was so incredibly worth it. =]
That’s the one – do you still have a link? Does she still offer it in the same format? I believe she was planning big changes.
I do indeed still have a link. The “big changes” she was planning involved getting them available for kindle and ebook, and discontinuing her heavy influence in the course.
I don’t see signs of that on her page for it, so maybe that deadline hasn’t been tripped yet. The version I took has pdfs and whatnot, so you still get usable files — they’re just not ereader friendly. Great for general computer viewing and printing, though.
http://howtoreviseyournovel.com/?rid=843
(That’s my affiliate link, so if you join the course with that “rid” on the end, I get paid from it. No pressure either way).
DO check out the link and read the course description and DO email me if you have any questions or want more detail on anything. I love/hated this course with all my heart. <3
As always, such a great, useful post! Love the idea of dissecting the scenes.
<3 Thanks! It's never fun to do that kind of in-depth dissection (especially of your own stuff!) but I've found it worthwhile every time I do it.
Burn in a fire?? Hmmmm…that seems close to home to me.
Sometimes it is impossible to remember who I was before children. Impossible. I know I was different, but I cannot remember how or why.
Good for me and my children, somewhere in my youth I had the realization that life was not going to be perfect and that I might as well give in to that. The other option was to suffer with ulcers and disappointment my whole life.
And I can vaguely remember the angst that came with my desire for perfection. And the ulcers.
You and Nick need a weekend of fire burning and dancing. That would NOT be a weekend to talk about how useful your strategies are for all of life, but a weekend to know that sometimes startegies get in the way of life.
I do love your strategies. And I love the post. I just wish that you were not so burdened by the need for perfection.
I always want to improve, but I have long ago given up the quest for perfection. I do sometimes still need to remind myself of it, but it’s no longer a burden for me.